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The diagram shows how Liverton docks change since 1980.

The diagram shows how Liverton docks change since 1980.
The diagram illustrates the changes that have taken place in Liverton docks since 1980.
Overall
Linking Words
,
liverton docks
Fix capitalization
Liverton Docks
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 have been transformed from an industrial area to
modern
Correct article usage
a modern
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 area.
In
Linking Words
addition
Add a comma
addition,
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 new facilities and
building
Check wording
buildings
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 have been added,
while
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 the number of ships and warehouses has decreased considerably. In the north of the
map
Use synonyms
, two
warehouse
Fix the agreement mistake
warehouses
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 and
crane
Correct article usage
a crane
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 have been replaced by
education
Correct article usage
an education
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 centre,
sailing
Correct article usage
a sailing
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 club and kid's playing area.
Similarly
Linking Words
 warehouse has been transformed with hotel, parking and apartments.
In addition
Linking Words
, in the middle of the
map
Use synonyms
ships
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, the number of ships
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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 been decreased from 3 ships to one ship museum.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, a bridge has been built and a river walk at the south of the
map
Use synonyms
. In south east of the
map
Use synonyms
,
crane
Correct article usage
the crane
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 has been removed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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