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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart compares the
percentage
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 of gross domestic products spent on healthcare in twelve European countries over a decade from 2002 to 2012. Units are measured in
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Percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
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, Switzerland spent the highest
percentage
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 of
GDP
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 on healthcare,
while
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 Estonia recorded the lowest
GDP
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 in three years.
Moreover
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, Belgium, Estonia, Spain and Switzerland spent relatively
same
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the same
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percentage
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 of
GDP
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 during the period. In terms of spending money, people of Switzerland spent
on health
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a
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considerably higher
percentage
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 of
GDP
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than
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on health than
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 other countries in
three
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the three
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 years,
which
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apply
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accounting for 11%.
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, Estonia, Lithuania and Poland experienced the smallest share from 2002 to 2012.
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, a significant
percentage
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 of gross domestic products
were
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was
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 in France in 2007, at around 11%,
whereas
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 only 6% were in
poland
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Poland
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 in
this
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 year. For the remaining countries, Denmark, Norway and Slovenia
also
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 spent a high
percentage
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 of
GDP
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 on
health
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the health
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 sector, at around 10%, 10% and 9%, respectively. In
comparision
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comparison
, the figures for the Netherlands(8%) and
Luxemburg
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Luxembourg
(7%) were lower.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, gdp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • notable
  • pattern
  • exceptional
  • deviation
  • neighbouring countries
  • economic policies
  • public health
  • data analysis
  • statistical comparison
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