The pie charts below give information about world population in 1900 and 2000.

The 2 pie
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shown below give information about the population
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the spending in the world between 1900 and 2000
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.
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, with the presented information, it can be clearly seen that Asia is the most
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among the other countries.
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, the spending in
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has the highest percentage. In the first pie chart, spending on different resources holds the first place, almost
a
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half, 40%.
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, the spending on things,
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as food and transport,
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nearly the same
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,accounting for 24 and 18%. The housing has approximately a fifth, over 12%. Compared to these fields,
spendings
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spending
on clothing has a much lower rate, about 6%.
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, Asia

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