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Everyone should be encouraged to use fewer resources rather than recycle more. To what extend do you agree with this statement?

In recent years, the question of
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whether
people
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 should use
less
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fewer
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resources
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 rather than recycling more has gained
considarable
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considerable
 attention. And
while
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 both of
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this
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these
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 opinions hold merit, I contend that using less is more important than
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reusing
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 more.
One
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 compelling reason for
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saving
resources
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 is that it reduces pollution
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levels
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.
It is clear that
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 using less
,
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apply
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 means raw materials
such
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 as trees, ores and water will
last
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 longer. It is necessary for the wildlife and ecosistematic condition.
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, a huge number of
people
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 are using plastic bags during
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shopping
. It is common to take a new
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 every time and
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throw
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 it away right after you
brought
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bring
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 your groceries.
This
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 approach
lead
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leads
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 to plastic pollution because only a tiny
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number
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 of
people
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 recycle them
properely
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properly
. But if only the residents started using fabric or paper bags, it will imdiatly reduce the
number
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amount
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 of plastic thrown away. And more than that, the recycling even won’t be a thing anymore because everyone uses a
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one
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single
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 bag for everything
instead
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. Equally important is the fact
that
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is
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it is
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 likely for
people
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 to save some money In a long term perspective.
Saveing
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Saving
resources
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 is about using less but more
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efficiently
. By doing
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this
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this,
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 you may start saving by reusing old things, rather than buying new.
As a
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result
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 you have
new
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a new
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 item that you wanted, and avoided
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clutter
.
One
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 need look no
further
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 than resewing
old
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old,
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 unfashionable clothes in new
.
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ones.
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 The only thing you need is enough imagination and a
litle
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little
 bit of skill to stop spending enourmous part of
salary
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your salary
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 on closing. In conclusion, despite recycling being a really important part of today’s world, I still believe that moving towards using
less
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fewer
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resources
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 will be more beneficial and give a
grater
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greater
 outcome in
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the
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 long
period of time
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run
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.

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task response
Answer the question more directly in each body part. Say clearly why using less is better than recycling more.
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Add one more clear idea about why recycling is still useful, then explain why using less is stronger.
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Some ideas are good, but they are not always fully clear. Use short and simple sentences to make each point easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end. Keep this 4-part plan.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully. For example: First, Also, For example, As a result, In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each body part has one main idea only. This will make your essay easier to read.
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You gave a clear opinion in the introduction and kept it to the end.
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You used real examples like plastic bags and old clothes. This helps your ideas feel real.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraphs, and the conclusion matches the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Most ideas follow a logical order.
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