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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people say that E books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

Some people say that
e books
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e-books
 and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspapers and magazines. To what extent do you agree or disagree
.
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Due to
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 the lack of
the
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internet access, there are many rural areas that do not have stable internet access.
As a result
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,
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and magazines can help the residents to keep update whatever is
happenng
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happening
 in the world.

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Answer all parts of the question. Say clearly if you agree, disagree, or partly agree.
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Write more than one main idea and explain each idea with a clear reason.
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Add one simple example to support your point.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear order: introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like 'first', 'also', 'however', and 'therefore'.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects to the one before it.
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Your idea is relevant to the topic because you talk about people in rural areas and internet access.
coherence and cohesion
You use cause and result clearly with 'As a result'.
coherence and cohesion
Your writing is easy to follow at sentence level.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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