In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

In recent years, digital
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methods
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as cards and mobile phones have become increasingly common. Some
people
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believe that
cash
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may disappear completely in the future. In my opinion,
although
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digital
payments
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will continue to grow, it is unlikely that
cash
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will disappear entirely. One reason for
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is that digital
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systems are very convenient.
People
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can pay quickly without carrying
cash
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, and transactions can be completed in just a few seconds.
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is especially useful in busy places
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as supermarkets or public transport.
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, many countries are already moving towards a cashless society.
For example
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, in China, it is very common for shops to accept only card or mobile
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.
As a result
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, digital
payments
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are becoming a normal part of everyday life.
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, not everyone is willing to give up
cash
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. One major concern is security. Digital
payment
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systems can be targeted by hackers, and
people
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may worry about their personal or financial information being stolen. Another reason is that some
people
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, especially older individuals, are not familiar with modern technology. They may find it difficult or stressful to use mobile
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systems.
Therefore
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, if
cash
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disappears completely, these
people
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could face serious inconvenience. In conclusion,
although
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digital
payments
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are becoming more popular
due to
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their convenience,
cash
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will still be necessary for many
people
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.
For
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this
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reason, it is unlikely that
cash
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will disappear completely in the near future.

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task response
For task response: your answer is clear, but you can explain more why cash may stay in some places like small shops or during power cuts.
task response
For task response: you answered both questions, but the first question can be more direct. Say more clearly if you think this will happen one day or not.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your essay is easy to follow, but you can use a few more linking words to show the steps in your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the main ideas are good, but you can develop each point a little more with one extra line of support.
task response
For task response: you answered both parts of the question and stayed on the topic all the time.
task response
For task response: your example about China helps make your point more real.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your ideas move in a logical order and are easy to understand.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital payments
  • convenient
  • efficiency
  • reduce crime
  • tangibility
  • privacy
  • limited access to technology
  • job losses
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