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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People
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 have nothing to offer in improving the
environment
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. Only the government and big enterprises can make
differences
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a difference
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 in
this
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 matter. I
dont
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don't
 agree with
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this
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these
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 ideas
i
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. I
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 think that change starts from
individuals
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individuals'
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 behaviour.
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,
i
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I
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 think that
people
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's behaviour should be corrected in order not to harm the
environment
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, and that could be achieved by educating them and raising awareness of the dangers of not preserving our
environment
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.
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, one of the most dangerous results of environmental dangers
are the
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is
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 global warming. In which
,
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apply
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 the world is suffering
from
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now.
Which
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This
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 is
from
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one of
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 the consequences of
people
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's neglect of the
environment
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.
However
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,
for example
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, individuals must start using
less
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fewer
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 plastic bags and start using more green-friendly materials. Like, paper-based or plant-based materials.
Secondly
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,
Improving
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improving
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 the
environment
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 is not only the concern of the
people
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.
On the contrary
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, governments, big companies, and
people
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 should be cooperative in order to overcome environmental problems and to enhance
it
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them
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.
For example
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, large car companies should stop producing
gas dependent
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gas-dependent
 vehicles and start focusing
in
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on
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 manufacturing more
electrical
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electric
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 cars. Governments
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on
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, on
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 the other
hand
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hand,
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 should invest more in
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environment-friendly
Replace the word
environmentally friendly
 projects. In conclusion, there
is
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are
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 so many opinions concerning
this
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 matter from supporters who think
people
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 have nothing to do
in
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with
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 enhancing
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environment
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the environment
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 to
opponent
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opponents
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. I think that individuals
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along
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, along
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 with governments and large
companies
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companies,
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 should cooperate
togethet
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together
 to have a better
environment
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.

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task response
Answer the question more directly in the introduction. Say clearly that you disagree and why.
coherence and cohesion
Make your main idea in each body paragraph very clear. One paragraph should focus on people, and one on government and companies.
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Use examples that are more exact and easy to follow. Explain how each example helps the environment.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, for example, and in conclusion. Do not break one idea into many short parts.
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Develop each point more. After each main claim, add one clear reason and one clear example.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeated ideas in the conclusion. Keep it short and clear.
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You gave a clear opinion, and this helps the reader understand your position.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You included examples about plastic bags, cars, and government projects.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is mostly easy to follow.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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