The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The graph provides key information about people who ate five portions of both vegetables and fruit
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in
UK
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the UK
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from 2001 to 2008. The units are measured in
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Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that all of (men, women and children) have increased.
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womens
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women
have the
highst
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highest
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eating five portions of fruit and vegetables per day,
whereas
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childrens
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children
have the lowest
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According to
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what is shown, women had the
highst
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highest
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with over 20% in 2001 before peaking around 35% at
2006
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then
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to 30% in 2008. Looking at the data more closely, children had
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starting with over 10% in 2001
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to 25% at 2007 and
declined
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to around 24% in 2008. Turning to the middle range, men had above 15% in 2001
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around 28% at 2006 and dropped to almost 25% in 2008.

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