The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first table illustrates variations in the total
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new york
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New York
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residents between 1800 and 2000.
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the other tables provide the changes in population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan,Brooklyn,Bronx, Queens, Staten Island)
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the same
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period
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of time.
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, the largest population in New York
city
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was in 2000.
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the smallest was in 1800. In terms of the highest proportion of people in Manhattan was at 76% in 1800
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the lowest was in 2000 at 19%.
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, the other districts had
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rose
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rise
over the years. In 2000, the population in New York was dramatically increased by 8,009,185 compared to 79,216 in 1800.
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And 3,437.202
in 1900. Regarding Manhattan's total proportion of people was the highest in 1800 and
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decreased
significantly in 1900 and 2000. During the fluctuations in popularity. Looking at the other
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the
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ratio
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was increasing from 1800 to 2000
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residents as well.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • people
  • city
  • five
  • district
  • grow
  • growth
  • rise
  • increase
  • increase
  • rise
  • fall
  • decline
  • high
  • low
  • big
  • large
  • small
  • more
  • less
  • over time
  • by year
  • in total
  • compare
  • compared with
  • whereas
  • trend
  • pattern
  • overall
  • feature
  • note
  • point
  • difference
  • lead
  • catch up
  • late
  • early
  • century
  • decade
  • period
  • 2000
  • 1800
  • 1900
  • continuous
  • steady
  • rapid
  • fast
  • slow
  • periods
  • numbers
  • data
  • report
  • describe
  • summarise
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