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Band 3

Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? are there more advantages than disadvatages ?

Many
people
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 nowadays prefer texting on their phones rather than making calls.
This
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 is mainly
due to
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 technological development; in the past,
people
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 communicated by writing letters. Looking at the positive side,
people
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 can connect quickly and interact in various ways, including video calls, text messages, and other online chats. The best part is that it provides a modern and convenient way to communicate.
On the other hand
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, there are some disadvantages.
People
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 meet
face to face
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face-to-face
 less often, and they tend to stay indoors, relying on their phones for everything. They order food and communicate online, which can lead to addiction and negative effects on social life. In short, everything should be used in moderation.

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Answer both parts more fully. Say why people text more, and clearly say if the good points are more than the bad points.
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Give more main ideas. Now your ideas are quite short, so the essay feels a bit thin.
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Use one or two clear examples to support your points.
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Make your position very clear from the start and keep it the same to the end.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a simple clear shape: start, body, end. This is good, but each body part needs more development.
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Link ideas more clearly with words like because, for example, however, and as a result.
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Some ideas jump too fast. Add one more sentence after each main point to explain it.
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Keep one clear topic for each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and a short conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is easy to follow in a general way.
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You answer the topic and mention both good and bad sides.
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Your ideas are relevant to phones and texting.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • text
  • texts
  • talk
  • phone
  • message
  • call
  • fast
  • easy
  • cheap
  • time
  • busy
  • reply
  • later
  • record
  • short
  • clear
  • tone
  • meaning
  • misread
  • friend
  • family
  • work
  • home
  • shy
  • nervous
  • help
  • group
  • plan
  • reach
  • everyone
  • care
  • rule
  • use
  • careful
  • balance
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