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Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? are there more advantages than disadvatages ?

The world has changed, particularly the ways
people
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 communicate. Today, we have devices
such
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 as
phones
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 which
improves
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 the efficiency of communication. Many
people
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 use
phones
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 to send
texts
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 more than
talking
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.
This
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 essay will examine both
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of
this
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 situation and provide reasons for it. On the one hand, using
phones
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 to send
texts
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 more compared to talking can have many advantages.
Firstly
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, communication through text can be more efficient. Users of
phones
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 deal with internet misinterpretations through calls more than
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.
Therefore
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, users will depend on texting.
Secondly
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, communicating through
texts
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 is less
time consuming
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time-consuming
 than calls.
People
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loose
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 track of time when calling, so they
chose
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 texting to end the conversation faster.
Finally
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, many
people
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 develop social anxiety growing up. Dealing with social anxiety is difficult
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 during conversations, so texting helps antisocial
people
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 to
be
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express and talk freely.
For instance
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, a recent study has proven that texting boosts antisocial
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people
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 confidence, allowing them to be more talkative.
On the other hand
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, depending on
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more
 relatively compared to calling has several disadvantages.
To begin
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 with,
connection
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 between individuals is more artificial through texting. Personalities could never be detected through texting.
For example
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, a recent
expiriment
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experiment
 on 50 text users proved that an individual’s personality is different through texting, because it’s a
man made
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man-made
 way of communicating.
Moreover
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, many issues like
impersonatation
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impersonation
 were created through texting. It is easier for a person to impersonate others through texting.
As a result
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,
this
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 leads to many problems like catfishing and
cyber bullying
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cyberbullying
.
Furthermore
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,
people
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 who text
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 a shortened way of English called slang. Using slang can weaken proper English grammar, so
people
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loose
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 the ability to
properl speak
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speak properly
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. In conclusion, communicating through
texts
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 more than calls can have several advantages and disadvantages.
Although
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 texting is more efficient than calling
it
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 can have many
sideeffects
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side effects
. It is only up to the individual on how to effectively communicate.

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task response
Answer both parts more clearly. You give reasons and talk about good and bad sides, but your opinion is not fully clear. Say clearly if the good sides are stronger than the bad sides.
task response
Develop each main idea more. Some points are good, but they need clearer explanation and a stronger link to the question.
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Use examples that feel more real and direct. Your examples help, but some seem too general or not fully explained.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear basic structure with introduction, body, and conclusion. Keep this shape.
coherence and cohesion
Make links between ideas smoother. Some sentences are hard to follow because the meaning is not clear.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph unity. A few ideas in the same paragraph do not connect closely, so the paragraph feels a little mixed.
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You answer the topic and discuss both good and bad sides.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are both present and easy to find.
coherence and cohesion
You use clear paragraphing, which helps the reader follow your essay.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • text
  • texts
  • talk
  • phone
  • message
  • call
  • fast
  • easy
  • cheap
  • time
  • busy
  • reply
  • later
  • record
  • short
  • clear
  • tone
  • meaning
  • misread
  • friend
  • family
  • work
  • home
  • shy
  • nervous
  • help
  • group
  • plan
  • reach
  • everyone
  • care
  • rule
  • use
  • careful
  • balance
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