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Writing Samples
Band 3

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Every human needs pure and clean
water
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. So some
people
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 think that
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water
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the water
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 source should be free.
Form
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From
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 my own perspective,
i
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I
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 believe that
water
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 supply should have low fees
witch
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that
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 everyone can afford. Because
water
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 purification
cost
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costs
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 a lot of money starting from recycling to produce clean
water
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.
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, dirty
water
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 could cause diseases. First of all,
government
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the government
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 spends millions on purified
water
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especially
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, especially
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 when the country doesn't have rivers or lakes.
Inresult
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As a result
, they have to use the sea's
water
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.
Which
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It
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 is extremely salty
and
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, and
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 no one can drink it without purification.
For instance
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,
i
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I
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 live in a country which has no
water
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 resources but the seas
,
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;
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it is basically a desert .
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, the government make efforts to make sure
people
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 have clean
water
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 with affordable cost.
Secondly
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, if
people
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 depended on well
water
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 or any
water
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 source and did not check if it
is
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was
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 safe to use or not, there would be consequences
due to
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 dirty
water
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. In villages, there is a high proportion of
people
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have
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who have
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 dangerous diseases because of
well
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the well
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water
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. In
conclosion
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conclusion
,
i
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I
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 think
people
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 should spend a low price on
a
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apply
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safe
water
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 rather than use dirty one bcecause nothing matters except
healthy
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a healthy
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 life.

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task response
Answer the question more directly. Say clearly if you agree or disagree, and keep this same view all through the essay.
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Explain your main ideas more. For example, say why free water may be hard for the government, and why low cost water is a better plan.
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Use examples with more detail. Your country example is good, but add one more clear fact or result.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas link in a smoother way. Some parts are hard to follow because the sentence order is not always clear.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph. This helps the reader know the main point fast.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph flow. Keep one main idea in one paragraph and support it before moving to the next idea.
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You answered the topic and gave your own opinion.
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You used an example from your own life, which fits the task well.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You used basic linking words like first of all, in addition, and in conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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