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The line graph below shows the population of two countries, A and B, from 2000 to 2025, measured in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates
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the residents
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residents
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residents'
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growth
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 in two different countries: A and
B
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from
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, from
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 2000 to 2025. Measured in Millions.
Overall
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,
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It
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it
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 is clear that
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the inhabitants
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inhabitants
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inhabitants'
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growth
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 increased in two countries over the period. County A consistently
the
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had the
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 most,
while
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country
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Country
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B
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 showed
fastest
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the fastest
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growth
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 despite starting at
lowest
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the lowest
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 point. In 2000, population
growth
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 in
country
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 A started at 50
million
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, and it experienced a slight rise
at
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to
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 around 55
million
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 in 2005
,
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.
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 After the population
growth
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 figure
reaching
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reached
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 the peak at around 68
million
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 in 2010.
However
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, the population in
country
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B
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 recorded
at
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the
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 lowest figure in 2000
and
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, and
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 it faced slight
growth
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reaching
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, reaching
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at
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apply
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roughly 55
million
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, after that reaching 50
million
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 in 2010. After the following 15 years, both countries A and
B
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 faced a consistent climb. The
country
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 A reached a peak at around 90
million
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,
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also
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and
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country
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B
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 recovered and reached the lowest figure at approximately 80
million
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 despite starting from the lowest point.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words growth, b, country, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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