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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

In many
countries
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countries,
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people
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 are dying
due to
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 hunger
which
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, which
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 shows the
signifance
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significance
 of
food
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.
However
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, some individuals waste the
food
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 they bought from shops or restaurants either purposely or
either way
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unintentionally
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.
Food
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, which is the basic
nesscassity
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necessity
 for every
individual
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individual,
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 should not be wasted for any reason
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, either
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either is
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whether
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 personal or
some
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for
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 other reasons. In my opinion, wasting
food
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 should not
even
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be
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 the
last
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 choice as many
people
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 are straving to hunger particullary in developing countries
such
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 as
pakistan
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Pakistan
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,
india
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India
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, nepal and others. Some
individual
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individuals
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 do not waste
food
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intenially
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intentionally,
 but they order much more
then
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 thier diet
which
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, which
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 is the main reason they need to waste the
food
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,
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.
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 Notably,
people
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 have been observed wasting
food
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 during festivals or parties, just to try or taste each and every
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food
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food,
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 they neglect the importance of
food
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which
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, which
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 results
into
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in
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 wastage
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,
wasteage
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waste
 of
food
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 is
also
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 considered
worng
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wrong
 even in
religious
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a religious
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 perspective. To stop
this
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restaurants
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, restaurants
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 should publicly announce or write on
thier
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their
 marketing boards
that
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apply
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how much
food
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 was wasted
last
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 day, which can be
feeded
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fed
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 to x number of
people
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 who are in actual need of that
food
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.
Inaddition
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In addition
, goverment or NGOs should run a
soical
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social
 media
capmign
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campaign
 which can make
people
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 more aware
that stop wasting
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of
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 the
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food
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importance of stopping the waste of food
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.
Instead
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, they can donate the
food
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 to the needy
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, which
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 can directly impact to econogmic growth for any country In conclusion, not wasting
food
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 should be the prime
responsiblity
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responsibility
 for any individual
but
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, but
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 shop or
resturants
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restaurant
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 owners can play
vital
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a vital
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 role.
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,
economy
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the economy
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 and cultural growth will take a sharp rise

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task response
Answer both parts more fully. You say why people waste food and what can be done, but some ideas need more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Add clearer main ideas for each body paragraph. One paragraph can focus on causes, and one can focus on solutions.
task response
Support each point with one simple example. For example, say how big meals in restaurants lead to waste, or how food apps can help give extra food away.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a clear way, like First, Also, For example, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Keep your ideas easy to follow. Some sentences are too long, so the meaning is not always clear.
task response
You answer both parts of the question.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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Your main topic is clear from the start.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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