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Band 5.5

You are due to move into a rented apartment next month but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: – explain your situation – describe your problems – tell him/her when you think you can move in

Dear Mr Singh, I am Rupinder Kaur, who lives in your flat number 302 with my father. I am writing to
apologize
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apologise
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 for not being able to move on the planned date
due to
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 my father's health concerns.
Last
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 week, he
got
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 an accident
while
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 on his way home. His vehicle hit a tree, and he got serious injuries not only
on
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in
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 his left leg but
also
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on
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in
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 his right shoulder. It will take almost a couple of months to recover. These days, he cannot walk independently, and I have to visit doctors alternatives days for his check-ups.
Moreover
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, it is quite difficult for me to pack
my
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all
the
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my
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 stuff alone, and I am
also
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 unable to find a new place to rent
due to
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 my hectic schedule. Since the flat is located on the first floor, it is convenient for me to go outside with him.
Therefore
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, I
will
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 like to continue living in it until he recovers. I am looking forward to your positive consideration. Yours sincerely, Rupinder Kaur

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task response
Say more clearly when you can move in. Give a clear date or month.
task response
Your main problem is clear, but some parts are not fully clear. Check small details.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like because, so, and therefore with care.
task response
You answered all parts of the task.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a good order.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • I am writing to let you know that...
  • I am sorry for the change in plan.
  • due to an unexpected problem
  • I will not be able to move in on time
  • There has been a delay at work
  • a family problem has come up
  • I need to stay here for a little longer
  • I still want to rent the apartment
  • if possible, please keep the flat for me
  • I expect to move in by...
  • Thank you for your understanding
  • I look forward to hearing from you
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