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The table below gives information on households with a regular use of a car in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007.

The graph illustrates statistics of the intensity level of
car
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 usage between 1971 and 2007.
Overall
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,it is clear from the graph that the number of
users
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 of two cars has gone up over time,
meanwhile
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while
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 the
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one
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one-car
car
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 and 3 or more
car
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 owners experienced only slight fluctuations. In 1971,
the dominant
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there
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 was no
car
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 category over 50%, when it started to fall dramatically.
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, 2
car
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users
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 gradually increased, started by approximatelly 8% goes to 28.
One
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car
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users
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 marginally changed with the start of 45% just little bit fluctuated over the period.
Secondly
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, 3 or more
car
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onwers sligtly
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owners slightly
 increased
about
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by about
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 8% and
interacts
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interacted
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 with no
car
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 owners in 2003.
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One
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One-car
car
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users
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 remained stable
there
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; there
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 is no
visiable
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visible
 change among them. In 2007,outweights
one
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car
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users
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around
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was around
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 45%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, users, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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