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The graph below shows the number of cars manufactured in 2020 with projections until 2035.

The presented multi-line graph
illurtrates
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illustrates
 the number of cars produced and future predictions in three different countries-
China
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, the
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Uk
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UK
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, Japan and
The
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USA
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- from 2020 to 2035,
meausred
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measured
 in
hundreds
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 of
thousands
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. In general, the
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Usa
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USA
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 and the
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Uk
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UK
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 follow an
overall
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 downward trajectory
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however
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,
this
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 is
oppostie
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opposite
 for
China
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. Notably, all the countries' production rate converges at some points: three of them(
China
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, the
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Uk
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, the
USA
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 )
is
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 projected to meet at the same level before 2030,
whereas
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 Japan will cross
China
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's figure later, towards the end of the given period.
To begin
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 with, there is a marginal decline in the
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Usa
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USA
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 number starting from 300
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hundred thousand
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hundreds
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 of
thousands
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 and will have ended up approximately 10
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hundred thousand
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hundreds
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 of
thousands
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 by 2035. The
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Uk
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UK
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,
on the other hand
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, have shown
slight
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a slight
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 decrease until 2025, after which follows
consistent
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a consistent
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 downward trend.
In contrast
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,
China
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 increases gradually from 100
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hundreds of
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hundred
thousands
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 to 150
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hundred
hundreds
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 of
thousands
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 in the given period. They all intersect at roughly 110
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million
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hundreds
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 of
thousands
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 in around 2028. The
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Usa'
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USA's
 experience is different
than
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from
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 others, as it started to rise
up
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persistently from 450
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hundreds of
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hundred thousand
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thousands
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 before reaching its peak at 460
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hundreds of
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hundred thousand
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thousands
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 in 2025 and
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 down gradually by 2030,
then
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significant
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a significant
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 drop
follows
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followed
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, equalling
with
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China
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 at approximately 140
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hundred thousand
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hundreds
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 of
thousands
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 just before reaching
to
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apply
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the end of
given
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the given
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 period of time.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, uk, hundreds, thousands, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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