*IELTS Training By Simiyu Paul_R The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the information about clothing exports in three states
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Japan, Colombia and Myanmar from 1999 to 2003.
Overall
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, the trend shows
the
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that
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Myanmar
was
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had
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zero exports in staring afterward it showed
the
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a
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steady
increased
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increase
and
then
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gradually decreased
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a gradual decrease
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while
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, while
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Japan and Colombia
were
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did
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not a significant differences over the time period like Myanmar. To commence, in 1990 we
seem
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saw
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that the highest unit of clothing export from Japan.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • clothing
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • figures
  • data
  • notable
  • peak
  • trough
  • exporting countries
  • standing
  • relative
  • pattern
  • disparity
  • over time
  • growth
  • decline
  • main features
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