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the two main graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in 1980 and 1990. Write a report describing the changes, at least 150 words.

The pie charts
gives
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 information about the five
types of main aources of
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main types of
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 energy
in
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sources in
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 the USA in 1980 and 1990
Overall
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, the
proprtions
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proportions
 of
the
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each
resources
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 were similar
both
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 years. Oil was the most popular resource in both years,
whereas
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 Hydroelectric Power was the least in
the
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both charts Turning to the details, the oil accounted for 42% of
whole
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 proportions in 1980.
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, in 1990,
although
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 the oil proprtion decrease to 33%, the rate was still the most used among the five resources. Natural gas consist of 26% in the pie chart in 1980, which reduced to 25%. Meanwhile, the ratio of Coal and Nuclear Power increased over the period from 22% to 27% and from 5% to 10%
respectively
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. Hydroelectric Power was 5% in 1980 and still 5% in 1990 again.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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