The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

The
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below demonstrates the expenditure of the
UK
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country
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and
France
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on consumer goods in 2010.
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,the proportion of the first chatr is the cars
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is increasd
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the
France
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UK
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takd 450,000
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France
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used 400,000 at the socend
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is Computers we can see a sligh fall in
UK
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they taked 350,000 but the
france
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it had rose between 350,000 to 400,000
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in the books line
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had a noticeable increased to 400,000
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the
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had 300,000 furthemore the Perfume
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France
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has a minor increased it be 250,000
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the
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has a significant fell to 100,000 the
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has a riped rose to 400,00 but
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has a decreasd to 150,000

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  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
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