The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table, pie, and bar
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provide key information regarding
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the Little
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Chalfont library. The units are measured in
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and other statistical measurements.
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, it is clear from the graph that the total number of loans increased steadily over the period.
In addition
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, the
adults
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aged 18–64 accounted for half of the library members,
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children represented approximately a quarter of the total.
According to
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what is shown, the pie chart
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that the predominant proportion was for
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from the age
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16–64, accounting for 51%.
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,
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aged 65 and over had the smallest share, comprising 12% of the total. The remaining 22% and 15% were occupied by children and young
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aged 13–17, respectively. In terms of the total loans by categories in 2016, children’s and adult fiction had the highest percentage in the table, accounting for 38% individually.
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children’s DVDs had the most modest proportion, representing 1%, young
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and
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’ audiobooks had the second smallest ratio, comprising 2% individually. The bar chart demonstrates that the
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of loans increased from 2007 to 2016, starting with nearly 16,000 in 2007.
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, it continued to increase gradually to its peak in 2016, with approximately 22,000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words adults with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overall
  • in general
  • the most
  • the least
  • higher
  • lower
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • drop
  • share
  • number
  • rate
  • group
  • age
  • men
  • women
  • books
  • children
  • adult
  • more than
  • less than
  • about the same
  • compared with
  • while
  • whereas
  • accounted for
  • made up
  • remained stable
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