Topic: The space exploration is too expensive and money should be spent on more important things.To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

Some

people

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think that too much funding is allocated

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exploring the cosmos. Other

people

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believe that

this

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money should be spent on more useful things

instead

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. I consider that

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exploration is unnecessary

and

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funds should go to raise poor nations' living standards.

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the equipment used during

space

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experiments is extremely expensive.

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conducting experiments, many of them just fail at the

innitiation

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initiation

stage and provide no or limited valuable results.

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this

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funding could be redirected to improving educational systems in African

countries

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, by building more educational establishments

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as primary and secondary schools in

African

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the African

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continents

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, business

people

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would

contibute

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contribute

to the empowerment of young

people

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and

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this

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doing so

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creating

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better conditions for their future jobs.

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multibillion dollars are spent to send one rocket

to the

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into

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space

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to search for a sign of

living

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life

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This

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budgets can be spent on

the

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apply

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creating businesses in the developing

countries

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will

created

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create

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jobs

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spaces across impoverished

countries

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while

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at the same time improve economies of the nations. Budgets spent on

third-worls

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third-world

countries

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would not be wasted because they are spent on tangible items and the results can be seen.

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, I would like to

re-emphisize

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re-emphasise

that

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exploration is a waste of money and is not worth the

fundings

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it is provided.

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apply

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supporting

countries

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with low economies will lead to more benefits to the world.

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Make your main idea more exact in each body paragraph.

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Add one clear example with real detail, not only a general idea.

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Explain more why space study is not useful now.

coherence and cohesion

Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each paragraph.

coherence and cohesion

Link ideas with simple words like first, also, because, so, and as a result.

coherence and cohesion

Check that each sentence connects to the one before it.

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You answer the question clearly and show your opinion from the start.

coherence and cohesion

Your essay has a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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Most main points support your opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

234 words

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Topic: The space exploration is too expensive and money should be spent on more important things.To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

In the few decades, there have been more and more cases of famous people being hounded by the press. Some people think that famous people in the media should have no right to privacy. To what extent do you agree?

The quality of computer language translation has improved significantly in recent years. Therefore, it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The amount of sport shown on television every week has increased significantly and this is having an impact on live sports events. Do you think the benefits of having more televised sport are greater than the disadvantages?

Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both sides of the argument and give your opinion.

You have been invited to speak at your old high school. Write to the school. In your letter: make a suggestion about what you could speak about find out how long you will need to speak for ask how many people will be there