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Band 3

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email -Recommend a new sport that would suitable for your friend to learn -Explain how your friend could learn this sport -Suggest you both learn this sport together

Dear Karen, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am
greatful
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grateful
 that you consider me
as
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a valuable
and
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person and
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 asked me to
lean
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learn
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 about a particular new sport. You take
keen
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a keen
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 interest in different sports activities and always hesitate to play in
as
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a group. I would recommend you to learn soccer, which is
quite
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 interesting activity and involve full body workout. I am quite familiar with various sports academies in my area. You can choose
particular
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 academy, which is nearest to you. By joining
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 academy, you can learn soft skills
such
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 as communication, co-ordination and
team work
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teamwork
 as well. They will hire a professional coach for you, who will train you and encourage you to be a part of one team. He will give you
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practical training on
ground
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the ground
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,
make
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and make
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 you aware of the rules and instructions carefully. I am quite confident that you will gain
enjoyable
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an enjoyable
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 experience by playing over there and will be a better version of yourself. I am
also
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 thinking
to join
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of joining
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this
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 academy. It would be great if we
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could gain
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this
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 experience together. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon! Yours faithfully, Sam

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Write more direct answers for all 3 points in the task.
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Use simple and clear ideas, and explain each idea a little more.
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Give one real example, like where you can play or when you can start.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like also, because, and so to join ideas better.
coherence and cohesion
Check each sentence, because some parts are hard to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Keep the same style for an email to a friend. Use a warm ending.
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You answered the main topic and gave a sport recommendation.
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You explained how your friend can learn the sport.
coherence and cohesion
The email has a clear start, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a good order.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • beginner
  • lesson
  • practice
  • healthy
  • local sports centre
  • keep fit
  • good idea
  • free time
  • learn together
  • feel confident
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