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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The multiple chart illustrates job destinations and remuneration from Anthropology students in the following 5 years after graduation.
Overall
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, most
of
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apply
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students want to accquire full-time opportunity rather than
part-time
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a part-time
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 job plus post-graduation study, and
their
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the
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 majority
income
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of their income
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stay
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stays
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 around over $75k to $100k per year.
According to
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 details,
full-time
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a full-time
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 job is
most
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the most
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 dominant option
from
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for
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 university graduation students, which takes up
to
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apply
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more than
a halve
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half
.
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, part-time choice and unemployment rates are 15% and 12%
respectively
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, respectively
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. Followed by the share of
full time
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full-time
 plus graduation study and not
known
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known,
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 made up 8% in both,
while
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 the percentage of combining part-time work and study was the lowest at 5% After half
of
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a
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 decade, the government sector accounted for
highest
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the highest
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 salary per year, which is 50%, followed by freelance
cousultants
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consultants
 at 40%.
Opossed
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Opposed
 to others, private companies made up
lowest
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the lowest
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 income
overally
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overall
, at 30%. With the range of $25k to $49999 and $50k to $74999, freelance consultants and goverment sector accounted for both 5% and 15% respectively.
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, private companies surpassed the others when the
firgure
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figure
 of
annually
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annual
 salary stays at 5% and 35%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words k with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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