the maps below shows the changes that occured to the town named willington in 1780, 1860 and 2000.

The map illustrates the changes that took place in the town of Willington in three years, 1780, 1860 and 2000 respectively.
Overall
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, the farms had vanished from the area
,
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instead
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school was constructed in the town.
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, the number of houses increased by five times and various necessary facilities
was
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built
like
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, like
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shops and schools. It can be clearly seen that in 1780, the huge area was covered by farms, but later only blocks were left for it and in 2000, there were no farms at all.
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the increased population, 500 homes were seen in 2000, which was only 100 in 1780 and 200 in 1860. Moving
further
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, a road was made from homes to the river and the school in 2000 to make it easy for people to travel. There was
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bridge in 1780,
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however
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in 1860, they added a bridge in the city.
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, to
fulfill
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the daily needs, shops had
constructed
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been constructed
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along
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with
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the
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river.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • farm land
  • open land
  • housing area
  • public building
  • main road
  • side road
  • river bank
  • grew over time
  • changed into
  • was replaced by
  • became larger
  • more developed
  • less rural
  • town center
  • residential area
  • local services
  • modern town
  • in the north/south/east/west
  • next to
  • in the middle of
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