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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
tourists
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 who visited a Caribbean
island
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 between 2010 and 2017, divided into three categories
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 visitors staying on cruise ships, those staying on the
island
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, and the total
number
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 of
tourists
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.
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, the total
number
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 of
tourists
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 increased steadily over the period.
While
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 the
number
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 of visitors staying on the
island
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 remained relatively stable after an initial rise, the
number
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 of
tourists
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 staying on cruise ships showed significant growth towards the end of the period. Looking at the total
number
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 of
tourists
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, it started at 1
million
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 in 2010 and rose gradually to approximately 2.75
million
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 in 2015.
This
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 figure
then
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 remained stable in 2016 before increasing sharply to 3.5
million
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 in 2017. Regarding
tourists
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 staying on cruise ships, the
number
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 increased from 0.25
million
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 in 2010 to 0.5
million
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 in 2011. It
then
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 fell slightly in 2012 before rising dramatically to reach 2
million
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 by 2017.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of
tourists
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 staying on the
island
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 was about 0.75
million
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 in 2010 and increased to 1.5
million
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 in 2013. After that, it remained stable for several years, dipped slightly to around 1.25
million
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 in 2016, and
then
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 rose again to 1.5
million
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 in the final year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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