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As water is a valuable resource, governments all over the world should control how much water their citizen use. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Water
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 is
cosidered
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considered
 an essential resource for human survival, yet the world is facing shortages of it.
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this
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reason
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 people argue that governments should control the amount of
water
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citziens
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citizens
 consume. I strongly agree with
this
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 view as it will reduce waste and ensure fair distribution.
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, government regulations
plays
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play
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 a massive role in reducing excessive
consumption
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 of
water
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.
without
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 regulating
humans
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, humans
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 tend to overuse
water
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 in their daily lives,
such
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 as taking showers, or
over watering
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overwatering
 gardens. So when multiplying
consumption
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 across the
world
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world,
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 it leads to
sginifcant
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significant
 loss. A study done by univiersity of oxford that 60% people tend to
overcosume
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overconsume
water
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 in their daily
activites
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activities
.
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, supervising
consumption
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 helps promote equality in access
of
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to
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water
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. In an unregulated system, wealthy people may use large quantities of
water
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, leaving less of it for the rest of the nation.
This
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 imbalance can be harmful in countries experiencing shortages of
water
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.
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 a study done by
Dr.
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 Miles, countries that are experiencing poverty tend to lose
water
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 very quickly
due to
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 shortages.
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,
i
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I
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 firmly believe that
governments
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government
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 regulations of
water
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consumption
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is
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are
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 both necessary and beneficial, as it reduces overconsumption and waste. And ensures equitable access for all.

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coherence cohesion
Write one clear idea in each body part, then add one short example.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words like First, Second, As a result, and In conclusion.
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Check word forms and small grammar errors, because they can make your meaning less clear.
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Add more exact examples, not only general claims or weak study lines.
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Answer the question more fully by showing why you strongly agree and what kind of control is good.
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Your essay has a clear opinion from the start.
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You give two main reasons that stay on topic.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body, and ending.
coherence cohesion
The order of ideas is easy to follow.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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