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The line graph shows the number of international students enrolled in four Australian universities from 2000 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates figures of international
students
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 registered in
different four
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four different
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universities
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 in Australia from 2000 to 2015. Unites measured in numbers.
Overall
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, the number of enrolled
students
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 increased consistently in four
universities
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 throughout the period. Both
universities
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 A and B experience the most wildly of
students
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 enrolled
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, followed by
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then
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universities
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C
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 and D
start
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, which start
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 from
the
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a
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 lower level. In 2000, the number of all
universities
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 recorded a slight increase until 2004 before
university
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 A
experiencing
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experienced
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 a rapid
rose
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rise
 for the next four years at 10,000, and
university
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 B remained stable in
same
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the same
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 period at around 50,000.
However
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, the registration of
students
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 in both
universities
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C
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 and D increased lightly reaching 1000 and
least
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apply
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stood at 500 before
university
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C
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 facing gradual climbed reaching
at
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apply
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around 3000 in 2008.
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,
university
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 A reached
at the
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its
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 peak at 16,000 enrolled
students
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 in 2013
and
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, and
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 it
stood
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maintained
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 the same number of enrolled
students
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 for the next 3 years, but
university
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 B recorded the second lowest trend
reaching
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, reaching
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at
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apply
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9,000.
Moreover
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, the
figures
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number
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 of
students
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 in
university
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C
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reaching at
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reached
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 6,000
and
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, and
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university
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 D stood at roughly 2,200.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, universities, c, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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