The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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This
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depict
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diagram
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gives us information about the
numbers
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number
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of the house are build in each year for two different big cities in the UK
during
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over
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ten
years
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.It is clear from the graph that
derby
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Derby
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was the first
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for the Brich cities.
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what is shown , in general Nottingham
recored
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recorded
a significant dip in 2002,2003, 2006,and 2008 with
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fewer
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than 50 houses.Inaddition in 2002
the
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,
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people
start build
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started building
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more than 60 bulidings 2003 and 2004.
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Lastly
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in the
last
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three
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years
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years,
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the city
had
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has had
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almost 250 new homes.
On the other hand
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, Derby kept increasing the growth of the houses without any dip. The
avrages
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averages
were 80 to 120 in the middle
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and
start
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to rising at the
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two
years
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with
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, with
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more than 300.
To sum up
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, we
cloud
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could
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say that
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also Derby
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Derby also
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had decreasing
behavior
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in
the
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apply
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2000
,
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apply
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and
2001
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2001,
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with the lowest amount nearly
reach
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reaching
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the 50's.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • bar
  • year
  • years
  • period
  • city
  • Derby
  • Nottingham
  • number
  • houses
  • built
  • go up
  • rise
  • go down
  • fall
  • higher
  • lower
  • more
  • less
  • same
  • different
  • overall
  • generally
  • in general
  • in contrast
  • whereas
  • while
  • during
  • from
  • to
  • between
  • the chart shows
  • it shows
  • notable
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • comparison
  • data
  • report
  • paragraph
  • sentence
  • linking words
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