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The graph below presents the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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This
Correct determiner usage
The
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 graph below provides key information about the employment patterns from 1930 to 2010 in the USA. It is clear
this
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incloudes
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includes
 five
parts
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,
such
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 as sales and office , industrial , and other services. The value is measured in numbers. The
parts
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 are determined by colours.
Thus
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, all of them have significant changes.
According to
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 what is shown , the highest alternation recorded by the farming , fishing , and
foresting
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forestry
 in the first year was more than 70.
Moreover
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 , the other
parts
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 increased in the
last
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 three years by almost 38.
On the contrary
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 , the lower alternation was for the most
parts
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 at the early years with dips ,
increase
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increases
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, and
also
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 the same behaviour without any actions.You can see that start to
happened
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happen
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 from 1940 to 1980.
To sum up
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 , we could say that technical continued to
raise
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rise
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 from almost 0 to 30 without any falls next to the industrial.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words parts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment patterns
  • industrial sector
  • agricultural sector
  • service sector
  • figures
  • percentages
  • trends
  • decreasing trend
  • increasing trend
  • significant growth
  • considerable decline
  • expansion
  • analyze
  • observations
  • key periods
  • transitions
  • conclusion
  • economy
  • shifted focus
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