The chart below shows the price in Euros of four types of bread per kilogram in one European country from 2001 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the amount of euros of four different
bread
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variations (
wholegrain
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, brown, white,
rye
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) per kilogram in
European
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a European
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city between 2001 and 2005.
Overall
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,
Wholegrain
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bread
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had the lead with
most
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the highest
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price but decreased to the third line
at the
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end
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end,
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meanwhile the other 3 was equal at the start
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; however
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however
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however,
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brown
bread
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rosed
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rose
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to the first place over the period
meanwhile
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, meanwhile
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Rye
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bread
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was always at the
low
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lowest
.
Althougt
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Although
White and Brown
bread
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increased generally
while
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Wholegrain
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and
Rye
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bread
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remained
steadly whith
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steadily with
little fluctuations. Brown
bread
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had a dramatic growth from 2001 to 2002, 0,6 to around 1,5 respectivelly and peaked minimally 1.6 in 2003 before
dipped
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dipping
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to 1.4 in 2004 and got back to 1.6 again in 2005. Meanwhile, white
bread
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started with 0.6 and
rosed
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rose
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to 1 in 2002 and peaked steadly 1.3 over the period.
Wholegrain
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had a significant improvement from 0.8 to 1.8 between 2001 and 2002 before a massive decline to 1 in 2003 and
then
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slowly dropped
around
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to around
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0.7 in 2004
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however
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; however
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increased gently to 0.8.
Rye
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bread
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had a steady line all the years, in 2001 started with 0.6 and fell a little to just under 0.6
but
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, but
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came again to 0.6 in 2003. After
remained constantly
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remaining constant
for 1 year,
Rye
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bread
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jumped marginally to approximately 0.7.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words bread, wholegrain, rye with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bread
  • price
  • Euros
  • kilogram
  • types
  • country
  • years
  • increase
  • decrease
  • compare
  • expensive
  • cheapest
  • stable
  • trend
  • change
  • amount
  • feature
  • summary
  • data
  • chart
  • observe
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