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The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. ⸻ New York City (all five districts) Year | Population 1800 | 79,216 1900 | 3,437,202 2000 | 8,009,185 ⸻ Manhattan Year | Population | As percentage (%) of total population 1800 | 60,515 | 76% 1900 | 1,850,093 | 54% 2000 | 1,538,096 | 19% ⸻ Other districts (Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) Year | Population | As percentage (%) of total population 1800 | 18,701 | 24% 1900 | 1,587,109 | 46% 2000 | 6,471,089 | 81%

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The table illustrates changes in the total
population
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 of New York City between 1800 and 2000,
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 the distribution of residents across
manhattan
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Manhattan
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 and the other four
districts
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boroughs
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 over the same period .
Overall
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, the
po-ulation
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population
 of New York City increased dramatically over the period .
While
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manhattan
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Manhattan
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initially
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 accounted for the majority of the
population
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, its proportion declined significantly,
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 the other districts experienced substantial growth and became the dominant areas by 2000
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, the
population
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 of the other districts showed a strong upward trend. Starting at only 18,701 people in 1800 (24%), the figure increased substantially to over 1.5 million in 1900, accounting for 46% of the total
population
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 growth continued dramatically, reaching approximately 6.5 million in 2000, which represented the vast majority at 81%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
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