IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 1

Topic:- People no longer use newspapers and television because The Internet plays the same role as them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Try for free →
in the
Correct determiner usage
In
show examples
 actuality,
people
Use synonyms
 are using
internet
Correct article usage
the internet
show examples
 to supply
newspaper
Check wording
newspapers
show examples
 and television
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
this
Linking Words
 text will talk about
advantages
Correct article usage
the advantages
show examples
 and disadvantages
about
Change preposition
of
show examples
 it.
firtsly
Correct your spelling
Firstly
,
yhe
Correct your spelling
the
 internet is
good
Correct article usage
a good
show examples
 tool in our lives where we can find
too
Rephrase
apply
show examples
many things
like
Change preposition
apply
show examples
:
news
Change preposition
like news
show examples
, videos, series and
applications
Punctuation problem
applications,
show examples
 where we are spending a lot
time
Change preposition
of time
show examples
, it
Punctuation problem
. It is
show examples
 getting
easy
Replace the word
easier
 for
people
Use synonyms
have
Verb problem
to have
show examples
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
good comunication between what is happening in
your
Fix the agreement mistake
their
show examples
 city, country or
Linking Words
also
Rephrase
apply
show examples
the world. forthless,
televion
Correct your spelling
television
 and newapapers both
biggers
Correct your spelling
bigger
 forms of comunications are
chagening
Correct your spelling
changing
 our form in the
people
Use synonyms
 appresitive the world.
people
Use synonyms
 are agree with that change
beacuse
Correct your spelling
because
 now you have a tool where you can find everything in the same place
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
 it is
intenet
Correct your spelling
internet

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Answer the full question. Say clearly if you agree, disagree, or partly agree.
task response
Add one or two clear main ideas and explain each idea more.
task response
Use simple examples, like news on phones or old people who still watch TV.
coherence and cohesion
Write in clear parts: introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy linking words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence connect to the one before it.
task response
You stayed on the topic about internet, newspapers, and television.
task response
You gave a clear main idea that the internet gives many things in one place.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a beginning, middle, and end idea.
coherence and cohesion
Some linking words are used, like firstly.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: