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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is right in our current world, we can get any type of
food
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 from another country by any nearest supermarket, definitely I support
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 kind of business to grow and improve the quality of transport and experience for all of us. Many of us like to travel just to try a specific type of
food
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 or famous dish from that country, where is we are buying a huge amount of money to live
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 moment, we can now try it from our stores,
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, Asian
food
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 had a great diverse in all of nations, we can eat Asian Ramen wherever we are going, and even there are many of speciality restaurants in
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 kind of
food
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 and others.
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, these types of trends and phenomena had an amazing influence to make people know and learn about others’ cultures and traditions, even when it comes to the way
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they
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 eat and tools.
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, all of the positive impacts of easy experience for other
food
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 culture, the enjoyment part is the delicious taste and texture of spices
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 you eat.
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, people who are used to eat define type of
food
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 or are used to eating usual foods may not accept it because of their gut system or any other health reasons.
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, I
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completely agree with
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 phenomenon
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 I strongly support it to
growing
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 and
improving
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improve
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 with
highest
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the highest
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 level of quality
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. Furthermore
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furthermore
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, I am
looking
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also looking
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 for a healthy side from other cultures.

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Make your main answer very clear in the first part. Say clearly that this is a positive development and why.
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Add one more main idea about why food from many countries is good or bad. This will make your answer more full.
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Use examples that are more clear and real. One example about ramen is good, but explain why it helps your point.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple way, like first, also, however, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Some parts are hard to understand. Make short and clear sentences so your ideas connect better.
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You answered the question and gave your opinion.
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You included an example about food from Asia.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You used some linking words like moreover, nevertheless, and however.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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