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International travel has become more affordable and many countries are opening their doors to increase the number of tourists. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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international
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International
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 travel is a popular option
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this
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 days, because a
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 of
countries
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 are opening their door to increase the number of tourists.
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this
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 essay will discuss
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages
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, ones of the biggest advantages is the economic, because if a
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 people go to visit
countries
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 they will spend money in food, hotels and turistic`s plans that it
country
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 offer, for intance it will be a big opportunity to improve the commercy in that
country
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, but it able to help
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 in the construction the news infracture in those
countries
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 what it needs is order and to be attractive to visit,
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 it will give a
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 oppotunities the new cultures and thinkings in the societies.
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on
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 the other hand, if we talk about disadvanges are when the
countries
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 are not ready to
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receive
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 of turists for their
infracture
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infrastructure
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crimel
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crime
 without control, for intance if people do not feel safe in that
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country
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country,
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 they
wont
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won't
 visit it.
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 conclusion, everything will depends about the
country
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 that the communities want to
visited
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 and if
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country
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have
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 the
infracture neccesary
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infrastructure necessary
 to have a good experience inside their
countries
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Answer both sides more fully. You talk about good and bad points, but the bad side is very short.
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Give one clear main idea in each body part, then explain it with a simple example.
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Use examples that are more real and clear. For example, say how tourism gives jobs or how too many visitors can hurt a place.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas easier to follow. Some sentences are too long and hard to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words well, like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph order. Your essay has an intro, body, and end, which is good, but each part needs clearer focus.
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You answer the question and talk about both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
You include an introduction and a conclusion.
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Your main idea about money from tourism is clear.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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