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Some people feel that government should take a large proportion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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in
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 recent years, some individuals feel that
government
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the government
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 should take a large proportion of people`s salaries to pay for necessary public services
such
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 as roads and
shools
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schools
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this
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This
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 essay will explain
advantages
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the advantages
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 and
disvantages
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disadvantages
 of
pay
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paying
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 a large proportion
from
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 their salaries for having a
country
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 with a good balance of life without
affect
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affecting
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 their pockets.
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, governments have a big resposability to destinance the taxes´s pays from the population in things that to help a contribution in the people´s life
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 as education ( schools and univerties), good public transport and roads, for intance europe has a good roads to conect countries each other, it was difficult challenge to finished that conecttion but now it is a good opportuny for every
country
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 and their population,
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 they can travel and share experencies between countries but it was possible with the support of taxes that the individuals paid.
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however
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,
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also there are
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there are also
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 countries with bad
government
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governments
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 that
just
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have just
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 stolen all
money
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the money
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and
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 they spend paying good and highest salaries
for
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 people
that
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 work with them,
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 Colombia is a great
country
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 with too many rivers, fauna and hard workers
but
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 the government
just
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has just
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 used all
money
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the money
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 to affect the
country
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in
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 conclusion, it will
depents
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depend
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 on the governments and their good administration of
recurses
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resources
 and how
it to
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they
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 help to improve a good society with values and education

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task response
Write both views in a more equal way. You talk more about one side than the other side.
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Give your own opinion more clearly. Say it in the introduction or conclusion in a direct way.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer main ideas for each paragraph. One paragraph for why high tax can be good, and one paragraph for why tax can be bad.
coherence and cohesion
Add simple linking words like first, however, for example, and in conclusion in the right place.
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Support each main point with one clear example and explain it more.
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You answer both sides of the question.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You use examples like Europe and Colombia to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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