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A bar chart shows the percentage of men and women in Great Britain who had driving licenses and another bar chart shows the percentage of men and women who applied for driving licenses at the age of 17-20. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart illustrates the proportion of males and females in the UK who got their driving licences between 1970 and 2010.
Overall
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, the percentages for both genders increased in the first chart,
while
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 they decreased in the second one.
In addition
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,
men
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 had a higher
percentage
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 than
women
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. In the first graph, the proportion of
men
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 with driving licences was higher than that of
women
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.
Moreover
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, the
percentage
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 of
men
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 rose steadily to a peak of 80%,
while
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 the figure for
women
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 increased gradually in each period, reaching a high of 60%. In the second chart, the figures for both genders decreased.
However
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, young
men
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 had a higher
percentage
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 than young
women
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 in both years. In 1996, the figure for young
men
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 with licences was 50%, before falling to around 45% in 2006.
Similarly
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, the
percentage
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 of young
women
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 was 30% in 1996, before dropping to approximately 20% by 2006.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, percentage, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • trend
  • highlight
  • period
  • comparison
  • driving license
  • applicants
  • age group
  • gender difference
  • trend analysis
  • significant differences
  • apply for a license
  • relation
  • overall
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