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The map shows the present layout of an post building and plans for its future redevelopment.

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The illustration depicts the current office building's room positioning
as well as
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 the upcoming plans for reconstruction work and the new room layout. In general, office
building
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buildings
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 will undergo significant changes in their layout
and
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, and
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 developed rooms will be larger,
however
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, slightly less in
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number
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 than previously. Many
,
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apply
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 rooms,
in particular
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, the WC's, a
a
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canteen, a kitchen
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as
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 well as the green spaces will be relocated and removed permanently. Regarding the offices, in the past there were 4 seperate office's that are planned to be combined
in to a
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into
 two larger
work spaces
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workspaces
,
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however
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, the two new offices will be added in the
kitchen's
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kitchen
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 and canteen's places respectively.
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 the new offices
in
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 the northern side of the building,
storeroom
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the storeroom
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 is the only room
that is
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 not going to be relocated or reconstructed.
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, in the
hallway
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 there is going to be
extension
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an extension
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 to the right-hand side's grass
area
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.
An
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 coffee machine, near the relocated
bathroom's
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bathrooms
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,
as well as
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 the newly implemented meeting
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area
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area,
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 are going to be located in its place.
Furthermore
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, in the western grass
area
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there are going to be added few chairs
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, a few more chairs are going to be added
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 at the bottom and an outdoor standing
area
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 infron it.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • present
  • future
  • plan
  • building
  • post office
  • area
  • space
  • room
  • entrance
  • exit
  • door
  • window
  • car park
  • parking
  • yard
  • road
  • path
  • sign
  • counter
  • desk
  • staff
  • customer
  • service
  • work
  • time
  • crowd
  • line
  • bigger
  • new
  • old
  • safe
  • easy
  • clear
  • open
  • bright
  • design
  • build
  • change
  • improve
  • add
  • extend
  • phase
  • cost
  • traffic
  • noise
  • safety
  • access
  • people
  • move
  • area
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