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A friend of yours is thinking of going to a music festival for the first time this summer. He/She has asked fot your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Explain why you think he/she would enjoy music festivals - Describe some problems he/she might have - say if you would like to join your friend

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Dear James, How are you? I'm writing to give you a few tips on your music festival. I think you will enjoy music festivals because one of your
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 musicians, YOYO, is gonna perform on Friday night. On top of that, there will be some fun games free of cost
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 you can win some exciting prizes. You're going to have a great time. Festivals are fun.
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, the weather can be awful. I'd suggest you carry an umbrella just in case
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also
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 don't forget your rain shoes as the floors are
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 slippery. One more thing
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 don't forget your government ID card.
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 will not only help you
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 your entry but
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 many regular buses will be closed that day. Actually, I am free on Friday, I'd love to come along if you want some company. Get back to me when you can. Cheers Marie

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Add a bit more about why music festivals are fun for you and your friend.
coherence and cohesion
Write one clear main idea in each part to make it easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like also, but, and so.
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Say a little more about the problems, like crowds or noise.
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You answered all parts of the letter.
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Your tone is friendly and right for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Your greeting and closing are good.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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