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In the past, most. People lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in a large city where they only know a few people in their area. what do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
Before world development pepole used to stay in rolar area with a small community. These places could be
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villages or towns
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located
 far away from big
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.
living
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 in contry side has multiple advantages and disadvantages.
This
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discuss
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details
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Body · 1
To begin
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with
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 the advantages
,
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 living in asmal collaster make people know each other very
will
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that for sure will
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 give them a
sens
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sense
 of support and trust.
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, mothers can drop their babys on nighbours to
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look
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 to low crime
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 and
seafty
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safety
. inhibitens used to
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doors
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most
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Furthermore
,the cost of living will be less when it
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urban
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Body · 2
In contrary, one of
bigest
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 disadvantages of
stying
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staying
 far
of
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cites
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 is the
abcent
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absence
 of essential life
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services
. For
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example
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huospitals
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hospitals
 and medical care
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 are not available in most of the small villages.
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 there are no suitable jobs ,
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that's
 why young
peple
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people
 tend to move to
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 area as much as they want a better income.
Conclusion
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, living in
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 town could
has
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 merits and
obstractions
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drawbacks
. It may not
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 youth any more. But it is
pearfect
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perfect
 for
oldery
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old age
 and
retierment
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retirement
 to spend calm and
quite
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quiet
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 time.

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Answer both sides more fully. Say more about good points and bad points.
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Add one more clear example for each main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas easier to follow. Use simple link words like first, also, however, and in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each part. Do not put too many ideas in one sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence clearly connects to the next one.
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You answered the question and wrote about both advantages and disadvantages.
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You gave examples about child care, crime, hospitals, and jobs.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is mostly clear.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • close-knit community
  • sense of belonging
  • look after each other
  • peaceful environment
  • low crime rate
  • social support
  • local traditions
  • public services
  • job opportunities
  • lack of privacy
  • gossip
  • social pressure
  • limited choices
  • move away
  • feel isolated
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