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Band 6.5

Part 1: The chart below shows the average cost of monthly contract for four different mobile (cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.

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The line graph gives a comparison of the four varities mobile in a European country between
january
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 to september 2002, measured in
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euro
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euros
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.
Overall
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,
much larger
Correct determiner usage
the
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 use
mobile
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of mobile
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 phone alphai It has increased
year
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 by
year
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. The domo mobile phone started
15
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at 15
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euro
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euros
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 in
January
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,
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. This
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this
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figure
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 The change was not significant, but in april
this
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figure
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was
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apply
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increased
20
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to 20
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euro
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 in april , it was not changed in june,
then
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this
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figure
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 inreased at 25
euro
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,
however
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this
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 was dropped
at
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to
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 23
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euro
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euros
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 in
september
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September
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. The
sim Tx
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SIM TX
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 was started at 9
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euro
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euros
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 in
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january
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January. This
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this
Linking Words
figure
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 was slightly increased
at
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to
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 13
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euro
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euros
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 in
june
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June,
 but
this
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figure
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was
Verb problem
apply
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dropped over the period. The
lex
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price
 which started at 12
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euro
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euros
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 in
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january
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January
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,
this
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 figue was slightli dropped
at
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to
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 10
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euro
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euros
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 in
february
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February
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, but it has
significant
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significantly
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 increased
year
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 by
year
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.
Finally
Linking Words
,
The
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the
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 Alpha
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 started at 5
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euro
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euros
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 in
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january
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January
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,
it
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apply
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was not changed over the period
but
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apply
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,
in
Correct word choice
but in
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June
Punctuation problem
June,
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this
Linking Words
figure
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was Increased
Wrong verb form
increased
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 dramatically
25
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to 25
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euro
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euros
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 in
september
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September
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Vocabulary: Replace the words january, euro, year, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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