The graph below shows the population figures of different types of turtles in India between 1980 and 2012.

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The line chart illustrates the number of changes of various
turtles
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32 years in India.
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, it is clearly seen that all species and
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Ridley
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turtles
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experienced an increase ,
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witnessing a downward trend in green
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and
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turtles
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.In the ultimate
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the highest indication was Olivier
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turtles
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whereas
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opposite
were
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true for leatherback
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. With regards to the population of Olivier
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turtles
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approximately
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130 and all species nearly 110 in 2012.Olivier
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turtles
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had the highest figures all the time.
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,the
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of Green
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are
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about 90 and
leatherback
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the number of leatherback
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turtles
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nearly
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60
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year.
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, Leatherback
turtles
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had the lowest figures over the timeframe.

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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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