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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the percentage of the total world
population
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 in
India
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,
China
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, the USA and Japan between 1950 and 2002,
in addition
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 to the expected growth for 2050.
Overall
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, it can be seen that most of the world's
population
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 is concentrated in
India
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 and
China
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 , which represented almost 40% by 1950 and more than 35% by 2002. It's significant to point out that
while
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India
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 has shown a gradual rise in its
population
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, going from 15% in 1950 to almost reaching 20% by 2050,
according to
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 the projections,
China
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 experienced a sudden drop of 5% between 1950 and 2002 , and it will reach a low of 15% by 2050.
On the other hand
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, the USA's percentage fell to 5% in 2002 , and it's expected to remain stable until 2050.
In contrast
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, Japan's
population
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 which represented less than 5% by 1950
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 has been declining
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, and
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 predictions show that it will plummet in 2050. In conclusion, most of the countries have experienced a decrease in their
population
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 over the years except for
India
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, that gradually risen over the years.
Although
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China
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 and
India
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 still represent
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the
percentage
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largest percentage
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 of the
population
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 worldwide.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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