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Euthanasia, or mercy killing, has been in the news more and more recently. Many people are strongly against such a practice, but there is a growing demand to have it legalized. How far do you agree with euthanasia being legal? Write an essay on it

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Even though a lot of
people
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 disagree with the
practice
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 of Euthanasia, there is an increasing
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 of
people
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 proposing to
legalize
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this
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practice
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. I argue that
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 should be legitimized and I will give my standpoints in the passage below. On the one side,
people
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 argue that it is an illegal
practice
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 because it is considered
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 form of
commiting
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committing
 suicide. Ethically speaking,
people
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 should not be given a choice to end their
lifes
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lives
 by
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themselves
, and they should follow the nature rountine.
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, from my point of view, our
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 should be under our control. I am not suggesting that we should kill ourselves without thinking.
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, imagine if a person is suffering from
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 disease
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 them feel
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they should have been given a right to end their life. They are going through some tortures that we could never have
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imagined. In
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 think from others' perspectives and give a choice for them to choose.
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 some
people
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 may think that it is a cruel
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 and no one should have been given
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 decision, there are
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dozens of
people
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 living in pain
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. It may be because of illness like cancer, emotional disease like depression, or serious physical disabilities. It will be good if they can come out and live an extraordinary life. If they cannot, we should
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 show our empathy and try to understand and respect their decision.
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, I stand for euthanasia
should be legalized
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 in
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 a modern society
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.

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Answer the full question more clearly. Say how far you agree, and keep this same view from start to end.
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Add one or two clear examples, such as a person with a final illness and strong pain. This will make your ideas stronger.
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Explain your main idea more. Some points are too short, so the reader wants more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer plan: introduction, one paragraph for the other side, one paragraph for your side, then conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more clearly with simple words like first, however, for example, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea only. This will help the essay read in a smooth way.
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You clearly show your opinion that euthanasia should be legal.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has both an introduction and a conclusion.
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You try to look at both sides of the topic, which is good for this task.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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