Public museums and art galleries are not needed because people can see historical object and artistic works by using computer. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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museum

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museums

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and

art

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galleries

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are not neded cause people can see historical

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objects

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and artistic works by using

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a computer

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and

art

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galleries

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are very important. Some

museums

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are important for historical and teaching people the history of their country and what happened in th war one, two and three

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I think they have to know about

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history,

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they can see some

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crucial diamonds

for the queen and some

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galleries

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have an important

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necklace

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, sometimes public

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galleries

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safe. The

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galleries

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have

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expensive things,

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going to make some crime and make the place not safe for the

vistors

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visitors

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galleris

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galleries

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there is nothing to see

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visited British

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it was a beautiful place

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free.

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because I didn't find anything

intresting

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interesting

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it was a good

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experience

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museums

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are important for

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historical

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history.

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Apr 21, 2026

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task response

Make your main view clear at the start. Say if you mostly agree or mostly disagree, and keep this the same in the whole essay.

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Answer all parts of the topic. Talk more about why people use computers and why museums still matter.

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Use simple but clear examples. Your visit to the British Museum is useful, but explain how it supports your idea.

coherence and cohesion

Put one main idea in each body paragraph. This will make your essay easier to follow.

coherence and cohesion

Use linking words in a clear way, like first, also, however, and in conclusion. Do not use too many if they do not fit.

coherence and cohesion

Develop your points more. After each main idea, add one or two extra sentences to explain it.

coherence and cohesion

You give a clear topic in each body paragraph, so the reader can follow your basic plan.

coherence and cohesion

You have an introduction and a conclusion, which helps the essay feel complete.

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You try to discuss both sides of the topic, which shows you understand the question.

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You include a real example about the British Museum, and this adds support to your ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

231 words

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