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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart gives information about telephone calls in the United Kingdom (UK), by local-fixed
line
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, national and international - fixed
line
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 and
mobiles
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 (all calls) categories from 1995 to 2002, in minutes (billions).
Overall
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, local - fixed
line
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 was a clear
favorite
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 among the
years
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while
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, while
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 the
least
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fewest
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 calls were from
mobiles
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. Meanwhile, calls on national and international lines have steadily increased over the
years
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. Phone calls by local
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fixed
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line
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lines
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 in the UK accounted for around 75
billion
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 in 1995. Over the
years
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, calls by local
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fixed
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fixed-line
line
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 increased gradually and hit a peak of 90
billion
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 in 1999.
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, it started streaming dramatically with around 85, 78 and 75
billion
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, respectively
in
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, in
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 the
years
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 2000, 2001 and 2002. Both national and international - fixed
line
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 and
mobiles
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 (all calls) increased moderately in each year. In 1995, the minutes of international
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fixed
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fixed-line
line
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 hovered around 38
billion
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while
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mobiles
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 stood at a modest 5 million. After 1999,
mobiles
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 experienced a sudden rise during the
years
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 1999 to 2002 and reached
its
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their
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 highest rate by nearly 45
billion
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 in
its
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their
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 category. By the end of 2002, local-fixed lines
occupies
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occupied
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 the top spot, followed closely with 10
billion
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 by national and international
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fixed
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line
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lines
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, mobiles, years, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommunications
  • landline
  • mobile phones
  • local calls
  • national and international calls
  • billion
  • minutes
  • growth
  • decrease
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • overtake
  • peak
  • plummet
  • steady
  • significant
  • minor
  • chart
  • period
  • comparison
  • category
  • data
  • illustrate
  • reveal
  • indicate
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