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Some people believe bicycle has lot of advantages whereas others believe bicycle has more disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Recently, cycling
become
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has become
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 one of
most
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the most
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 attractive outdoor activities.
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 it has been used as a environmental friendly transportation method. Many people argue that the bicycle is an
exlent
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excellent
 mode of
transportation
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transportation,
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while
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some
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others believe that
these are
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it is
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 not reliable.
This
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 essay will discuss both these views in
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detail
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. 
To begin
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 with merits, Cycling
considers as
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is considered
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 one of the most
effecint airobic
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effective aerobic
 exercise
mode
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modes
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, if it
done
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is done
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 in daily bases, it would be
benefical
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beneficial
 for both
cardiovasclar systeme
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cardiovascular system
 and
mucles
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muscle
 power.
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, it will help reducing cholistrole level and
mintain nourmal glycimic
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maintain normal glycemic
 rate. On
other
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the other
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 hand,using
bicycle
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a bicycle
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 would be faster in trafik days,that why many
worker
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workers
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 tend to use it as a
mine
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means of
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 transportation
method
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apply
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.
In contrast
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,we can not say that cycling on
crowoded
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crowded
 streets is
handerd pearcent
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hazardously per cent
 safe. A high
noumber
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number
 of
incedent happend
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incidents happened
 to raiders
whill
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while
 they are crossing streets.
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,
road
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a road
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trafic
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traffic
 accident.
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, not all streets are suitable
mostly
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, mostly
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 it rough,sliparry and
unconvenient
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inconvenient
 for the bike
,
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;
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 wheels may
damaged
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be damaged
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 and
cost
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incur additional costs
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 for maintenance. In
som
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some
 areas ,when
weather
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the weather
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are
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is
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 not expected
with a sudden rain or in hot sunny summer
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to be sunny and hot
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, it will
hard
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be hard
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 to move by bike. 
To sum up
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, bicycle has a huge
benefets
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benefits
 for our health in
long
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the long
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tearm
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term
. Whenever it has high risk on
roads
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the roads
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.

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task response
Answer both sides in a more equal way. You talk about good and bad points, but your own view is not fully clear.
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Add one or two clear examples. This will make your ideas stronger and more real.
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Explain each main idea a little more. Some points are good, but they stop too fast.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'however', and 'for example' in a careful way.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph order and sentence flow. Some sentences are hard to follow because the order is not smooth.
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You discuss both views, so you answer the main task.
coherence and cohesion
There is an introduction and a short ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear paragraph plan: good side, bad side, then ending.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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