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The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14 to 16 - year old students studying a foreign language in an English spoken country and the top 3 foreign languages.

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The first diagram shows general data about
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the proportion
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 of 14-16 years
student
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, both boys and girls, who studied foreign
languages
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,
while
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 the second one demonstrates how many
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student
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students
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 were keen on
studing
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studying
 French, German, and Spanish. The bars are measured in percentage.
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, females had an upward trend in
studing
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studying
 foreign
languages
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, reaching nearly 45
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1984 and 40
in
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per cent in
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 2007. In comparison with girls, boys had slightly lower 30
precent
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per cent
 in 1984 and 25
in
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per cent in
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 2007. Turning to the top 3
languages
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, which were
prefered
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preferred
 by
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student
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students
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,
it is clear that
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 over the
last
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 3 decades needs in learning foreigh
languages
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dropped
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has dropped
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 dramatically.
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, French was chosen by 50
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percent
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per cent
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 of
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student
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students
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.
In addition
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,
this
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 number
declined in double
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doubled
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 in 2007. In terms of
German
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the German
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 language, 20
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percent
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per cent
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 of
learner
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learners
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 were
study
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studying
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 it in 1984
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;
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 suddenly,
this
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 number dropped to 15
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2007.
On the other hand
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, the
smallest
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lowest
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 rate had Spanish language with nearly 10
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percent
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per cent
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 during 1984 and 2007. Remarkably,
this
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 is the only language which were prefered by more
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student
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students
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 in 2007 than in 1984.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words student, languages, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • foreign language
  • bilingualism
  • cultural exchange
  • trends
  • globalization
  • motivation
  • curriculum
  • educational implications
  • cognitive development
  • historical ties
  • economic partnerships
  • cultural exposure
  • media
  • digital communication
  • xenophobia
  • international understanding
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