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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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These diagrams illustrate information related to the police budget during 2017-2018 in one area of Britain.
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, the table shows where the
money
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 came from
and
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, and
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 the pie chart represents how the
money
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 was distributed.Starting with the
table
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table,
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 it shows that most of the
money
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 came from
national
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the national
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 government
with
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, with
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a
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the
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 highest amount in 2018 and
lowest
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the lowest
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 in 2017,and moving to the pie chart
most
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, most
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 of the
money
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 was distributed on
policemen salries
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policemen's salaries
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 during
the
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apply
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both periods. First of all, the police budget reached a
highest
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high
 of 318.6 million pounds and a
lowest
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low
 of 304.7 million pounds in 2017
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. It
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 shows
in
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that in
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2017
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2017,
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 the income was a little weak
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then
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, then
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 slightly increased in 2018.
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, moving to the pie chart shows that in
2017
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2017,
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 75% of the
money
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 was spent on salries and in
2018
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2018,
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 with a decrease of a few percent which reached 69%. And
quarter
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a quarter
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 of the
money
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 got distributed on facilities, and the rest few percentages on technology.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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