The chart below shows the number of international applicants from four countries that a European university had from 2004 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart demonstrates the international applicants to
universites
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universities
of one
eruopean
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European
country from the countries
USA
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, Japan,
China
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and Russia between the years 2004 to 2008.
Overall
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,
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USA
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the USA
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and
China
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had the highest proportion in the chart.
While
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USA
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the USA
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and Japan showed an upward
trend
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,
China
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had
an
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a
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downward
trend
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overtime and
Russia
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Russia's trend
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trend
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was fluctuated.
Initially
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,
USA
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applicants were about 13000 in 2004.
After
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this
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, the rate began to rise gradually.
Then
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, in
2006
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2006,
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both
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USA
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the USA
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and
China
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had the exact same number of 18000.
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, it escalated and reached
approxiately
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approximately
27000 in 2008.
Similarly
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,
Japan
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the Japan
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trend
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increased but with a
smaller
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lower
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rate from about 7000 in 2004 to 10000 in 2008.
In contrast
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, the figure
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illustrated
a decline in
China
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's
trend
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. In the beginning, it was the largest country in 2004
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27000
applicats
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applicants
.
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it decreased dramatically to reach roughly 15500 in 2008. For Russia, the number was inconstant
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, going
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up to 2500 and down by 500.

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